
St. Marks National Wildlife Refuge, Stony Bayou, March 29, 2021
I’ve been down this dike before with you. I often veer off our path gaping at clouds in the wide blue sky, shuttering a desire to leave my bike and explore the bayous. It’s why we’re here, to feel the expanse of nature, the filling of our souls. Often ordinary but glorious cumulus clouds fill the sky.
There are clouds today but these clouds are clearly foreign, such an exotic clutter against the blue cloth of the sky. Thin cotton rolls layer above our heads. Is this what they call a “mackerel sky,” I wonder but don’t ask out loud. You wouldn’t hear me anyway. You’re too far ahead. I always fall behind when we travel this dike. I want to stretch my arms, embrace the whole of the sky. I fall in love with these clouds like I fell in love with you.
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I’m participating in Merril’s prompt for dVerse Prosery Monday. Click here if you want to join in. Frankly, I have no idea what I’m doing, but I seem to be attracted to challenges where I’m limited to 144 words or less. I suspect it’s because I’m working on a novel … lol.
Categories: Writing
Marie A Bailey
Writer, blogger, knitter, cat lover, and introvert.
Lovely, Marie! I’m not counting your words, but as long as you’ve written a prose piece no longer than 144 words, and you’ve incorporated the prompt (which you have), then you’ve done it right.
I like how you went with the cloth theme in the second paragraph, and I liked your use of “shuttering” in the first because in made me think it could have been an allusion to taking photos.
It’s a beautiful piece of prose!
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Thank you! I have exactly 144 words (I like to get the exact number … it satisfies the OCD part of my nature … lol). I wasn’t consciously alluding to photography when I used “shuttering,” but I like that you thought of it that way.
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I thought it probably wasn’t deliberate, but it caught my eye. 😀
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Aww, this is so beautiful and carefree. ❤
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Thank you!
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Great job, Marie! You’re a pro!
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And you are so sweet! ❤️
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I love your carefree story of embracing the clouds.
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Thank you!
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I like the atmosphere of this, which describes being “lost in nature” so well. Her companion feels almost superfluous.
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Thank you! Trust me, my companion is not superfluous 😉
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You’re welcome 🙂
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A lovely story indeed!
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Thank you!
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A moment that is perfectly described in thought. Well done!
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Thank you!
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I always enjoy reading what you write so don’t fret over not knowing what you’re doing. I haven’t heard the term a “mackerel sky” in years. Your photo of said is lovely.
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What a sweet thing to say! Thank you, Ally!
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What an ethereal write! Enjoyed this!
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Thank you!
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This is wonderful, Marie!
And darn it… I was gonna go with a mackerel sky, as well… but then, instead of writing, spent the evening on the phone with three different people… till way too late. Now, if I play, I shall have to think long and hard 😉
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Hey, Dale, you could still go with a mackerel sky … they are beautiful 🙂
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Yes they are (like the one I recently shared…)
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Where … on instagram?
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Oh sorry… Yes!
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👍🙂
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😀
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I love how you managed to incorporate the clouds so well and make them yours.
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Thank you, Björn. I really appreciate your kind words.
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Luv the way you juxtapised the awesome clouds and the fancy of falling in love
Have a good week
Much❤love
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Thank you for your kind words, Gillena!
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Inspiration!
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Thank you!
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Wow, what a cloudscape! Beautifully captured. Thank you for sharing, Marie! 🙂
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Thank you, Amy!
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Lovely merging of clouds and love. 😊
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Thank you!
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So good!!!
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Thank you, L. Marie!
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Such fun! Love the words, Marie. You made me think of my dad. When email and digital came along, he frequently took pictures of clouds and sent them to me.
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Oh, what a sweet memory! Thanks for sharing it, RoseMary 🙂
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